- Tue Jan 29, 2013 8:03 pm
#141020
God does what he wants.
I put some more thought into it, and I feel that the best way to help you with your writing is to do a quick mock-up of the minor flaws I see. Tell me if you need anymore help, I can't wait for the next part!
Once upon when I wrote this there was a friendly* alien** named
Intelli***. His mental capacitor**** and internships were the greatest
on the planet of the World Wide Spiderweb-- even anyone in the system
of the star Kahawia Pua.
One space day, Intelli sat on his space beach chair on his space lawn,
doing nothing. He tried to flirt with the molecules that were hung in
front of him, but gave up after 10 kijingas*****. He then attempted to
do poetry;
"Yellow
dancing
im bored"
He cried.
Then he got a space call on his space cell phone******. It was from
his brother Psychi*******, a professor******** of psychology at the
local space university.
"idiot"
"OHAIZOR PSYCHIR"
"Whatcha doing Phineus?"
"IM BORED AND LAZY ALL THE TIME"
Intelli heard a muffled snickerdoodle from the other end of his space
phone, but he wasn't hungry*********.
"Shut up chill," said Pschord. "HOW BOUT BEING A LAZY PERSON ALL DAY
BUT NOT FEEL USELESS LIKE YOU USUALLY DO?"
Intelli considered for a space moment**********.
"IM HUNGRY SUDDENLY DESPITE THE JOKE I TRIED TO MAKE EARLIER DO I GET
FOOD**********?"
"(The biggest number I can think of)'s them."
"IM COMING FOR FOOD"
Intelli hung up, and shouted to his sister. "ROSE! IMMEDIATELY CEASE
YOUR WOMANLY LABORS AND ACCOMPANY ME TO THE SPACE UNIVERSITY!"
I'll finish this later...
*demented
**canadian
***but hes in space
****this is what alien brains am called
*****this is space words on the planet for time, like 3.234542 seconds
******i bet cell phones are called cell phones in space
*******this is funny because intelli-GENT and Psychi[E]
********teaching is the same in any solar system but not seconds
*********SNICKERS IZ A CANDY AHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
**********AHAHAHAHHAHAHAHA oh food is same only seconds are special
"To do things right, make sure no one is around to see you doing things wrong."
