My Fanfiction That is Going to be on Minecraft Pro
Posted: Tue May 31, 2011 5:50 pm
Here is the revised version.
Now, this is a more updated version of Minecraft. More realistic. Changes in actual gameplay. Please give constructive criticism.
Cheez, I will use your post to help make this story better! Thank you!
A Rebellion
The alarm on my bedside table went off. It beeped at 8:00 every morning without hesitation. I sat up and rubbed my eyes. Another day, ten more gold. That was how I lived.
I got out of bed and dressed myself. I then grabbed my watch, the watch that we were require, by the government, to wear. They included many features like a clock, G.P.S., our Mission App, and many other things.
I walked downstairs using the ladder in the corner of the room and entered the lobby. The lobbyist nodded and smiled, just like every other robot in this God forsaken city.
I touched the screen on my watch as I walked out into the temperature-controlled city. Nether City is the only city in the world that has electricity, and we use it!
I hit the mission app and the automated voice tells me that I am to mine obsidian for a top-secret government program. I just laugh. Nothing is secret here, by now everyone would know.
I walked over to the MineCart station and loaded my diamond gear in storage MineCart and climbed into the passenger MineCart connected to it.
I was headed to mine Q-7 on the outskirts of the city. It was rarely used so no one but me would be there. Again with the secrets! It took me a while but when I arrived I was fully awake and ready to mine.
I grabbed my diamond pick and descended into the Earth. The air became hot and humid. I finally found the extinct pool of lava that was hit by water. Obsidian was everywhere. I began hitting the pickaxe against the smooth shiny mineral.
In about two hours I had just enough to call it a day. I proceeded out of the mine and headed back towards the city. It was beginning to get dark. It was very strange. Everyday seemed to get shorter.
It was dark enough that mobs could spawn now. In the distance I saw a skeleton shooting arrows at a pig. I saw a zombie aimlessly walking around.
Then I saw what everyone dreads, a creeper. Its small green body was walking dangerously close to me. Thankfully the MineCart was speeding along so the creeper couldn’t do any damage.
When I returned I walked into City Hall where all the miners were turning in their finds. When it was my turn I handed them my watch and they scanned the code for my mission.
The robot smiled at me and told me in an electronic voice that I was to follow the assistant that would be here shortly. It hit a button and told me to go sit in the waiting area.
I followed the instructions and a human came out of the door and signaled me to come.
“Finally!” I exclaimed, “A human! I am getting pretty tired of these electronic things.”
He laughed and replied, “Same here.” There was a slight pause. “So you’re here on the secret mission, right?”
I nodded. “Why d’ya ask?”
“You’ll be the first person to explore the world that this here city is named after. The Nether.”
I sat there astonished. To do something so big was such an honor but it was a punishment at the same time. The Nether is equivalent to Hell. Lava is everywhere and the mobs are rumored to be deadly.
“I can’t.” I simply replied.
“You have no choice, at least not now.” The assistant told me. “You think that the government is going to let you make your own decisions?” He laughed.
It was a stupid idea to think I could choose my fate. The government did that, for everyone. If my fate was to die exploring a wasteland, well I had no choice. But I wouldn’t stand for this. This isn’t how I wanted to go!
I found out that you only need ten blocks of obsidian to make one portal to this world. I had twenty. I would be able to explore and then escape. I wouldn’t have to work for this oppressive government anymore. I could found a city, filled with rebels from Nether City and we could fight back.
But what a stupid idea that was. The city had weapons of mass destruction. We have no idea how to make them but the government just says they are from where we originally came from.
This only puzzled everyone further but no matter. We all went on living our normal lives like nothing ever happened.
The assistant showed me a door and then left. I opened it and there was a giant staircase headed towards the center of the Earth. I sighed. I was going to have to deal with that unbearable heat like in the mines.
But when I got down there I found it to be strangely cool. This showed the government’s unfairness. First of all they only give us enough food for one meal a day! Now they are letting thousands die of heat stroke in the mines when they could easily install air conditioning.
Their children and families all got great medical help, but us, ha, no way! Most people go from the common cold here. They can survive the most severe cancers and whatnot.
The room was made of iron and another substance that was a deep grey. Two men stood in front of a table with a big piece of paper on it. The smiled that artificial smile that the robots give and held out a hand for me.
My face remained neutral as I shook their hands and then they motioned for the chairs around the table. The table was made of the same iron as the walls.
“Hello, eh,” the first man turned towards his friend and whispered to him. He seemed to be asking a question. He then turned back towards me. “James!”
Wow, these people sent me on a secret mission and they didn’t even know my name. How pathetic.
“You are the agent that will be traveling to the Nether,”
“Against my will,” I muttered under my breath.
“What did you say?” he exclaimed. He ran over and punched my face causing blood to spew from my nose.
“Never defy the government!” he smiled at himself and sat back down. “Now cough up the obsidian.”
I got half of my obsidian and shoved it at him.
“Good,” he looked at the shiny navy-blue ore, “Ralph, tie him up!”
The first man began constructing the portal and the other man ran towards me. I sidestepped and shoved Ralph back towards the portal. It had just lit. He flew through it and screamed. The first man turned towards me and had a demonic glare on his face.
“WHAT DID YOU DO?” he shouted as he lunged at me. “That was my brother you killed!” Again, I sidestepped and pushed him to the side.
“He’s not dead! He’s just in the Nether!” I tried to tell him.
“No! Get out of here! NOW!” he pointed to the portal with something he had pulled out of his pocket. It was grey and small. He had his finger on a trigger of sorts and was aiming it at me.
He then understood I didn’t know what it was and aimed it at the ground and pulled the trigger. A loud bang reverberated in the room and a projectile shot from the tip. It made a dent in the floor.
“GO!” He screamed.
I ran towards the portal and flung myself in. Time seemed to slow down. I hovered there as my vision became blurry and distorted. But whenever Ralph went through it took only a second. Could it be a paradox?
Seconds later I fell on a crunchy ground. It was red and looking in the distance I concluded that it was also flammable. Lava replaced water and the sky was red. Blocks that I had only heard about were right in front of me! Netherrack, Soul Sand, and Glow Stone!
I stood up and looked around even more. In the distance and I saw what I could only think of.
“Zombies!” I yelled. One of them heard me and ran towards me with a grunt. I knew that grunt, but it belonged to a pig, not a zombie.
The creature ran up to me and poked my arm. It looked at me with a puzzled look and ran back to its clan. I laughed in relief when I heard a sound much like a young infant crying.
I turned around and sure enough behind me was a creature that looked like a ghost.
“Oh no… A GHAST!” I screamed. I ran, I don’t know how far before I came to a stop. There was a cave in front of me and torches were placed inside. Ralph was probably here. I went inside and as I went deeper into the cave I heard what sounded like hundreds of Ghasts. Then I was in the main clearing.
Well, about my dialogue. I always learned to press the enter key after someone says something. I am guessing that is incorrect from your comments though...
Now, this is a more updated version of Minecraft. More realistic. Changes in actual gameplay. Please give constructive criticism.
Cheez, I will use your post to help make this story better! Thank you!
A Rebellion
The alarm on my bedside table went off. It beeped at 8:00 every morning without hesitation. I sat up and rubbed my eyes. Another day, ten more gold. That was how I lived.
I got out of bed and dressed myself. I then grabbed my watch, the watch that we were require, by the government, to wear. They included many features like a clock, G.P.S., our Mission App, and many other things.
I walked downstairs using the ladder in the corner of the room and entered the lobby. The lobbyist nodded and smiled, just like every other robot in this God forsaken city.
I touched the screen on my watch as I walked out into the temperature-controlled city. Nether City is the only city in the world that has electricity, and we use it!
I hit the mission app and the automated voice tells me that I am to mine obsidian for a top-secret government program. I just laugh. Nothing is secret here, by now everyone would know.
I walked over to the MineCart station and loaded my diamond gear in storage MineCart and climbed into the passenger MineCart connected to it.
I was headed to mine Q-7 on the outskirts of the city. It was rarely used so no one but me would be there. Again with the secrets! It took me a while but when I arrived I was fully awake and ready to mine.
I grabbed my diamond pick and descended into the Earth. The air became hot and humid. I finally found the extinct pool of lava that was hit by water. Obsidian was everywhere. I began hitting the pickaxe against the smooth shiny mineral.
In about two hours I had just enough to call it a day. I proceeded out of the mine and headed back towards the city. It was beginning to get dark. It was very strange. Everyday seemed to get shorter.
It was dark enough that mobs could spawn now. In the distance I saw a skeleton shooting arrows at a pig. I saw a zombie aimlessly walking around.
Then I saw what everyone dreads, a creeper. Its small green body was walking dangerously close to me. Thankfully the MineCart was speeding along so the creeper couldn’t do any damage.
When I returned I walked into City Hall where all the miners were turning in their finds. When it was my turn I handed them my watch and they scanned the code for my mission.
The robot smiled at me and told me in an electronic voice that I was to follow the assistant that would be here shortly. It hit a button and told me to go sit in the waiting area.
I followed the instructions and a human came out of the door and signaled me to come.
“Finally!” I exclaimed, “A human! I am getting pretty tired of these electronic things.”
He laughed and replied, “Same here.” There was a slight pause. “So you’re here on the secret mission, right?”
I nodded. “Why d’ya ask?”
“You’ll be the first person to explore the world that this here city is named after. The Nether.”
I sat there astonished. To do something so big was such an honor but it was a punishment at the same time. The Nether is equivalent to Hell. Lava is everywhere and the mobs are rumored to be deadly.
“I can’t.” I simply replied.
“You have no choice, at least not now.” The assistant told me. “You think that the government is going to let you make your own decisions?” He laughed.
It was a stupid idea to think I could choose my fate. The government did that, for everyone. If my fate was to die exploring a wasteland, well I had no choice. But I wouldn’t stand for this. This isn’t how I wanted to go!
I found out that you only need ten blocks of obsidian to make one portal to this world. I had twenty. I would be able to explore and then escape. I wouldn’t have to work for this oppressive government anymore. I could found a city, filled with rebels from Nether City and we could fight back.
But what a stupid idea that was. The city had weapons of mass destruction. We have no idea how to make them but the government just says they are from where we originally came from.
This only puzzled everyone further but no matter. We all went on living our normal lives like nothing ever happened.
The assistant showed me a door and then left. I opened it and there was a giant staircase headed towards the center of the Earth. I sighed. I was going to have to deal with that unbearable heat like in the mines.
But when I got down there I found it to be strangely cool. This showed the government’s unfairness. First of all they only give us enough food for one meal a day! Now they are letting thousands die of heat stroke in the mines when they could easily install air conditioning.
Their children and families all got great medical help, but us, ha, no way! Most people go from the common cold here. They can survive the most severe cancers and whatnot.
The room was made of iron and another substance that was a deep grey. Two men stood in front of a table with a big piece of paper on it. The smiled that artificial smile that the robots give and held out a hand for me.
My face remained neutral as I shook their hands and then they motioned for the chairs around the table. The table was made of the same iron as the walls.
“Hello, eh,” the first man turned towards his friend and whispered to him. He seemed to be asking a question. He then turned back towards me. “James!”
Wow, these people sent me on a secret mission and they didn’t even know my name. How pathetic.
“You are the agent that will be traveling to the Nether,”
“Against my will,” I muttered under my breath.
“What did you say?” he exclaimed. He ran over and punched my face causing blood to spew from my nose.
“Never defy the government!” he smiled at himself and sat back down. “Now cough up the obsidian.”
I got half of my obsidian and shoved it at him.
“Good,” he looked at the shiny navy-blue ore, “Ralph, tie him up!”
The first man began constructing the portal and the other man ran towards me. I sidestepped and shoved Ralph back towards the portal. It had just lit. He flew through it and screamed. The first man turned towards me and had a demonic glare on his face.
“WHAT DID YOU DO?” he shouted as he lunged at me. “That was my brother you killed!” Again, I sidestepped and pushed him to the side.
“He’s not dead! He’s just in the Nether!” I tried to tell him.
“No! Get out of here! NOW!” he pointed to the portal with something he had pulled out of his pocket. It was grey and small. He had his finger on a trigger of sorts and was aiming it at me.
He then understood I didn’t know what it was and aimed it at the ground and pulled the trigger. A loud bang reverberated in the room and a projectile shot from the tip. It made a dent in the floor.
“GO!” He screamed.
I ran towards the portal and flung myself in. Time seemed to slow down. I hovered there as my vision became blurry and distorted. But whenever Ralph went through it took only a second. Could it be a paradox?
Seconds later I fell on a crunchy ground. It was red and looking in the distance I concluded that it was also flammable. Lava replaced water and the sky was red. Blocks that I had only heard about were right in front of me! Netherrack, Soul Sand, and Glow Stone!
I stood up and looked around even more. In the distance and I saw what I could only think of.
“Zombies!” I yelled. One of them heard me and ran towards me with a grunt. I knew that grunt, but it belonged to a pig, not a zombie.
The creature ran up to me and poked my arm. It looked at me with a puzzled look and ran back to its clan. I laughed in relief when I heard a sound much like a young infant crying.
I turned around and sure enough behind me was a creature that looked like a ghost.
“Oh no… A GHAST!” I screamed. I ran, I don’t know how far before I came to a stop. There was a cave in front of me and torches were placed inside. Ralph was probably here. I went inside and as I went deeper into the cave I heard what sounded like hundreds of Ghasts. Then I was in the main clearing.
Well, about my dialogue. I always learned to press the enter key after someone says something. I am guessing that is incorrect from your comments though...